A song I wrote earlier in my songwriting life

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Member Since: Feb 16, 2003

*Can't Live With You*

As I sit here alone,
I know what I have to do.
You brought me pain and tears,
I'm not to blame, It's you.

The silver glints in the moonlit sky,
But soon will be darkened with red.
As the pain and tears are ended,
You'll see this has gone to my head.

(chorus)
I can't live with you,
Soon I won't have to.
Soon you will see,
This won't affect me.

You thought this be over,
Your blinded by your sense of fun.
Now you see we're playing a game,
Pass the dice, It's now my turn.

(Chorus x 2)

As I sit here alone,
I know what I have to do.
You brought me pain and tears,
I'm not to blame, It's you.

The sun comes up as you go down,
Now the worlds a better place.
Without the constant reminder of my pain,
As I no longer see your face.

(Chorus x 1)

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Czar of Midi
Administrator
Since: Apr 04, 2002


Feb 16, 2003 11:25 pm

OK, now this is 2 set's of lyrics. Have you any music to this one? You are a very powerfull writer it would seem. There is some real anger, and the word's almost sound threatening. Have you any thought's on music for this one as well?

Noize 2 U

...bringing sexy back
Member
Since: Jul 01, 2002


Feb 17, 2003 05:16 am

i feel a forum project coming on...

Administrator
Since: Apr 03, 2002


Feb 17, 2003 05:35 am

My best critique is more for your life rather than the lyrics...get the hell away from whoever inspired this...

Member
Since: Feb 16, 2003


Feb 17, 2003 07:26 am

I can't really get away from myself can I?

And yes I have got music for it but it's in my head. It's kinda like a song that Linkin Park would sing, it requires a very powerful voice and an electric guitar.

...bringing sexy back
Member
Since: Jul 01, 2002


Feb 17, 2003 07:30 am

dark moody rock? cool!

Member
Since: Feb 16, 2003


Feb 17, 2003 07:38 am

Heh heh!

I think I'll go write another song....

Czar of Midi
Administrator
Since: Apr 04, 2002


Feb 17, 2003 08:35 pm

You do that Jennster. I started a couple of track's for the other lyric's you posted. Very dark, moving from acoustic to hard and dark guitar. Cant wait to see another set of lyric's form you.

Noize 2 U

Contributor
Since: Sep 09, 2002


Feb 18, 2003 12:37 am

wow..

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