Apr 24, 2006 02:51 pm This is based on listening in phones at work, but did you use any reverb? it sounds like everything is right smack in front of my face. I'll have to listen at home but there didn't seem to be much depth.
any constructive criticism
Posted on Apr 24, 2006 02:48 pm
nephilimvox
Member Since: Apr 24, 2006
hey, i just finished this new song and i want to know if you guys have any constructive criticism on it. quality, recording tips, song structure, sound. anything would be welcome.
www.unsignedbandweb.com/music/bands/7399//
it's the only song up right now. i should have another today.
thanx
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Apr 24, 2006 02:51 pm This is based on listening in phones at work, but did you use any reverb? it sounds like everything is right smack in front of my face. I'll have to listen at home but there didn't seem to be much depth.
Apr 24, 2006 02:58 pm i used ozones mastering reverb on the final track and some on the vocals and drums. but i see what your saying. it comes off a little harsh.
Apr 24, 2006 07:35 pm hey, i just put up a second song. kinda different, trying not to be to pigeonholed into one genre. same link second song.
Apr 24, 2006 11:39 pm ok i remixed a little of the first song with a touch more reverb especially on the guitar. do you think this sounds better?
Apr 25, 2006 12:26 am I'm not a good critic of that genre, and I need to admit it.
I'll comment only on the mix itself. (This review stuff is so rough. Hate to get it...hate to give it) I love your snare. Full, set back, good verb, driving. I would love to hear more kick. Bass low tones are very nice and present (B string or detuned bottom end notes capping the phrasing... nice touch by the way ) but I would personally love to hear more of the bass throughout the rest of the song. I also have to agree with dB, the Vox are 50 feet in front of the rest of the band. (nice vox by the way too!, actually a good point to highlight). Oh gad I got out of the box and babbled about the song itself anyway.... Real nice musicianship. The production so far definately merrits any work you want to put into it in the mix MHO.
I hate it when folks say that to me and they most always do. Go back and work more on the mix... yak yak yak... But they are usually right.
Apr 25, 2006 12:41 am wow thanx. i tend to be my own worst enemy at these things and i'm very critical of my own work. i'll try setting the vocals back a little more and see how that sounds.
Apr 27, 2006 02:26 pm Hey Nephilimox -
I'll provide some feedback about the song itself.
From a style perspective I think this song resembles Korn a little too much. The bass, the vocal style and tone, and the melodic structure all point to a heavy Korn influence. Try and differentiate yourself. Thats a large part of writing original material.
Instrumentation is difficult to hear, but for the most part everything sounds solid. From what I could tell, the rhythm section seems tight which is key in any genre. Sounds like straight up power chords on the guitar, which is something I think you should consider building upon.
Vocals aren't bad. Every now and then a few notes are off key. I think you could work on creating more of a "hook" that gets the listener interested.
Good job and keep writing!
Apr 27, 2006 04:58 pm I thought it was played and put together very well(Refering to the 1st song). My comment may be biased by the genre of music I know best that being blues and 60's-70's rock. But I sometimes felt as though the guitar was hiding. But your getting great sound in your recordings. So heres an USAF vet wishing you guys good luck.
May 01, 2006 11:43 am a BIG thank you to everyone for putting in their 2 cents. i have been using this site for awhile and i know you guys really know your stuff
i am working on a new mix to resolve some issues you have mentioned(especially the fact that someone thinks we sound like korn. eeewwwww). i hope to have it posted later in the week.
a couple of questions though.
any thoughts on the second song? i kinda threw it together in a day for some people at work comparing me to chris daughtry from american idol.
and is it noticable that all of the drums are sequenced? my drummer is on the fritz, so it is just easier for me to write the stuff myself using samples in fruity loops.
thanx again for your patience and input
May 09, 2006 08:19 pm hey
good stuff.
i dont like really giving criticism either but i know that hearing it is an important part of growing as a musician, engineer, etc.
i have to admit though that i'm not really a good egineer. i consider myself some what green when it comes to home recording. so i will offer some "creative" criticism about the music itself.
as far as the drums, they actually sound pretty good. my only criticism is that i think the frequent crash symbols take a bit away from the mood of the tune itself. especially when you start singing. other wise programed drums sound pretty good.
also, when the second set of vocals come in (pre-chorus maybe??), they are a little lower in the mix as compared to the rest of the vocals. they sort of just drop when they come in. easy fix in the mix i would think.
and there are one or two spots in the second verse (or chorus) where the pitch kinda gets away from you bit vocally. the rest of the singing is definitely solid.
over all, this is a solid tune. especially considering you threw it together in a day! good job!
original music makes the world go around!! keep it up!!
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