New- Extremely rough draft - comments/suggestions appreciated

Posted on Aug 10, 2009 03:12 pm
CptTripps
Czar of Turd Polish
Member Since: Jun 20, 2006

New song in my profile called "So Good Today". It is about recognizing and overcoming addiction. It is very general in description is why I think people of all sorts can identify.

Anyways when I say rough, it is really rough. I need a new intro that doesn't sound like ACDCs' Big Balls (it was intended for laugh purposes), I also need a cool brige, a solo, some bass guitar and a drummer to redo my tracks (I actually tracked them with a single LDC and was happy enough for a rough take). Single LDC with line6 guitars, lyrics written in 20 minutes and sung doubled in 15. Much work to do.

I am liking the Vox at times and dig the general styling but am working on re-wording a few things that seem rushed. Would probably be better with a singer who does not struggle to hit higher notes (I go low easily).

Anyways, some overall opinions would be welcome for sure. Should I spend the time refining this or just start on the next one? Are there any specific vocal lines you like, any you hate with a passion (I do), or any that you think flow/don't flow well.

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olddog
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Since: Jul 02, 2003

Aug 10, 2009 07:36 pm

Hey I think it's killer Cpt! Really sounds good mix wise too, except the bass is a little lost. I really like the tone on the vox, did you pitch shift one a bit on one of the takes? Anyway I think you did a fine job on them. I can never get that sound, but I'm always trying <G> As far as lyrics you'd need to post them cause I can't really make out most of them (not unusual for me, my hearing is shot).

Definite thumbs up here!

Dan

Dematrix
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Since: Nov 27, 2007

Aug 10, 2009 09:26 pm

ah, very nice Capen!

good guitar work especially the mutes (sch-nice'n tight.)

if this is a rough draft, then cant wait to hear the finished version.

Kaos62
Kaos is only a form of insanity
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Since: Feb 03, 2005

Aug 11, 2009 10:54 am

Great stuff Cpt!!!!!!!!! I Really like this , my kind of thing.......... The structure is great, I've not had time to listen close enough to the vocal, but I will do over thext couple of days, but on first impression all seems good!

The only thing on first impressions theat i thing needs looking at is the ending it seems a little flat / rushed

CptTripps
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Since: Jun 20, 2006

Aug 11, 2009 12:11 pm

Thanks dudes,

Olddog, the bass is lost as there is not one, just guitars n drums :) The lyrics... I have already made several changes as they are too rushed quite often, little re-wording and I will sing again. Oh yeah, no pitch shifting, just doubled takes.

Deon, thanks. The mutes to all out rock on the chorus took some time to get the dynamics right. Things seem so simple when they are done, but getting there takes time when you have infinite variations to pick from :)

Kaos, the ending is pretty much non-existent atm. I basically took the root notes from the verse riff and just rang em out for the intro, bridge and ending. I plan on doing a little something more with those parts though.

Right now it's just the cake with no icing, though it seems the direction it's headed has HRC approval, something that means quite a bit to this one man band :)

Thanks again guys, I am going to get the vocals all figured out and will post a new "rough draft". Once I'm happy all around I will re-track the whole shebang.

Noize2u
Czar of Midi
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Since: Apr 04, 2002

Aug 12, 2009 08:46 pm

Dude, that is so cool just as is. The drums are way in the back, but it doesn't actually sound odd at all. In fact it almost fits with the kind of spooky feel the vox have. I don't honestly know that I would mess with the vox as they sound so friggin spooky and.... Well just plain cool. I'm all for the experimenting and getting different sounds and you have a really cool vocal thing going.

It reminds me of a demo I worked on for Green Jelly about a hundred years ago.

either way, I'm diggin it.

CptTripps
Czar of Turd Polish
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Since: Jun 20, 2006

Aug 13, 2009 12:03 pm

I updated the track with a halfass solo I did just to fill in the dead parts, not a final version but a little more meat to it.

Noize, right on and thank you. I was doing the 1 mic drums just to track out some song ideas. But your right, for some reason it works well with this song.

The only problem I have with the vox, I had to sing them on two tracks cause I was running out of breath. If I can create a few breathers in there I have hopes of performing it live with a side project band. As is, we would have to do two vocalists swapping lines back n forth.... actually, that might be cool...

Time to rethink :) I appreciate the feddback guys, very much so.

Noize2u
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Since: Apr 04, 2002

Aug 16, 2009 08:24 pm

I'm still diggin it. I think once the guitars get a bit more bottom end with the bass being worked out and maybe a little more low cruch on the guitars the vocals will sound really cool as they are or done very much like they are now. That effect they have is very cool. And maybe its just me but the drums sound a lot more there now especially after the solo. Which the guitar solo works well and sounds cool with it.