Message of Wonder-
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Posted on Jun 12, 2008 05:50 pm
tonyd1970
The fat one always watches us.
Member Since: Nov 08, 2002
Tune I wrote and recorded a while back.
it does not conform to the "rules"
i wanted to make my own sort of Doors "The End" type of song.
this was my stab at it.
members.cox.net/stevebaz/Messageofwonder.mp3
Lyrics:
MESSAGE OF WONDER
Message of wonder, illumination of our deterioration,dedication to the immaculate, knowledge of the perverse. The taste of wine, the taste of women, I think its time
Small breath, breath of air and touch the gentle wind
Spread yourself out on the gates to pay for your sins
Hush sweet and lonely child, call out to the waves
Let them take you far away, let them take you far, in these tired days….
And if it comes down to you, then don’t you turn away. I’ll be there if you want me to
Before… your life, before your life slips away
Who are you to trust in me, cause im alone and its rainin
I see tomorrow in yesterday, its closing in so restrainin
Ever so restraining
And im filled with false hopes and wine
There she go down to me, nothing that ill ever see
She believes that im the truth, but I wont, I wont be confused
I wont be confused
Faces change now and then, but what about the all rest
Tiny breath breath of air
We’re facing, im always facing, facing im always facing… west
Facing west
Its time to leave and ive not found any beauty out of reverie
Leave me, alone
Leave me , alone
I can’t help the world.
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cooloFrisco's Most UnderratedMember
Since: Jan 28, 2003
Jun 13, 2008 04:11 pm I like this. The electric guitar works really well the way you did it. I would say the only thing is maybe pull the vocals down a bit, and maybe ease off the reverb a tad on the intro vocals (though I do see the effect your going for).
I wanted to add something snappy to this post, but couldn't think of anything...
Jun 13, 2008 05:54 pm I think the vocal sits about right in the mix, and the effects on it are OK; maybe a little over. I'm listening on my living room system, and the deep bass is kicking *** for sure.
olddogMember
Since: Jul 02, 2003
Jun 14, 2008 04:11 am Gotta go with coolo on the vocals they are just a bit to loud to me. Keep in mind I'm listening on headphones though. hmm, maybe that's why my vocals are usually too low in a mix. :D
Good song tony, it does indeed have a Doors style to it. I like the fx on the vox, guitars are sounding good, good job!
Dan
Noize2uCzar of MidiAdministrator
Since: Apr 04, 2002
Jun 14, 2008 04:58 pm Tony, this is honestly one of the best pieces you have done in my humble opinion. It is still the dark TonyD we all know but it has a much better production feel to it. Especially the drums and as coolo stated the electric guitar sound works so very well as it comes and goes in the mix.
I also love the feel of the bass in the mix, it works so well with the drums and adds even more darkness to the feel of the piece.
I have to agree the vocals could come back just a little in the mix, but as well they are some of the best vocals you have turned out with some killer feeling that really adds to the song.
I'm putting this one at the top of the TonyD list for now.
Killer tune indeeed.
tonyd1970The fat one always watches us.Member
Since: Nov 08, 2002
Jun 19, 2008 04:57 pm Thanks all, for the positive reviews...
I cant mess with the mix on the road, so its stuck.
Im not sure, noise, that the top of the tonyd list is all that good..... but thanks alot. means alot from my often very pro sounding peers to dig a tune...both the song and the sound...
im smilin'
ps never had one lesson
-ferris b.
