Posted on Jun 23, 2004 10:55 pm
Member Since: Jun 01, 2004
i have a new song, it's been a productive week! i am really happy with the way it came out, but it took a million tries to get the drum track right. and it has a badass solo :)
i took one look at you before you took the fall
looking back is unproductive
when you have to lose it all
i have to run
in small steps
so i wouldn't lose the way
it was good before today
and i wish i could have stayed
i thought what mighta coulda been
i had to look within
and running slow
in small steps
it writes itself without control
i looked but didn't see you there
i knew i had to let you go
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HuePinnipedal Czar (: 3= Member
Jun 23, 2004 11:13 pm Smokin' song !!! Tight as a drum ! Likin' that guitar solo as well . You SHOULD be happy in my most humble opinion . Great jarb, hd !
Since: Apr 11, 2004
(gonna listen again heh heh)...
It reminds me a little of the early Police sound .
TheTincanbugsloppy dice, drinks twiceMember
Jun 30, 2004 10:45 am hdoyle, I heard the song and I do like the guitar solo. Also the drums were right on. But I'm not a big fan of punk... and I didn't really get into the music, probably because of this. Also, I did notice that the vocals at the end seemed a little off-pitch, but maybe that's part of the punk sound you were going for.
Since: Aug 05, 2003
Jun 30, 2004 02:09 pm hey hdoyle
i personally hate pure punk but there were things about your song which really grabbed me. the intro actually reminds me of...tool, i think. also, i love that rising major third in the bassline. when the drums slow down and the guitar chunks up right before the vocals come in, that's great. LOVE the rhythm/phrasing in the outro vocals. the guitar solo rocks too.
some technical suggestions: when the solo run starts, i'm hearing some extra bass frequencies on the lead guitar which are causing it to submerge in the mix. could clean that up maybe by cutting the bass and boosting in the midrange. the vocals could really use some compression to even them out. true you ARE doing punk so you might want the DIY sound to a certain degree, but vox comp would go a long way toward making the mix sound a bit more pro. personally i believe that even if you want a rough-hewn final mix (maybe because your recording ethic leans that way,) still you shouldn't leave the vocals uncompressed.
all in all, a great song in a genre i never listen to :)
Jul 04, 2010 04:31 pm hi guys long time no see.
Since: Jun 01, 2004
i have re-recorded this yesterday and wanted to know what you thought of it. i have just recently started working with a click so the intro is really rushed - should have used a slower tempo to start it out. but i think it came out pretty good
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