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May 27, 2004 08:10 am Hi CompSem, I can just barely hear the vocals. I had to listen again just to make sure that what I was hearing was vocals at all... The rest of the song is pretty interesting as an instrumental, though I'd love to hear you add a cool solo in there, personally speaking. I find it appealing that you are using rock instruments in a mood-setting, dramatic manner here, without a lot of rock influence - I just thought that the industrial feel of it was pretty neat.
One thing I did notice on my second listen it seems like you are trying to keep the listener in a state of suspense throughout the song - swelling strings, march-style drumbeat, etc. The guitar as well - it seemed very steady and somewhat unchanging in emotional charge.
Personally speaking, I find that songs speak to me more when there's more of an ebb and flow - build up to your strong part to give it emphasis, wind it down to just a couple of instruments playing softly for an introspective feel or something similar... But that's just me talking, and maybe that's not the effect you are going for with your music. I mean, we do play very different styles, so maybe that's what you're going for.
Overall I like the song, and I'm looking forward to hearing the finished version!
